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DevilBottles
26th December 2005, 01:30 AM
Yes, this is the (possibly low level) anticipated sequel to my previous fiction, "The Exploration of Gruntilda's Lair." (A link to it found in my sig.) This will hopefully have a more in-depth story than last time, but I can also say that I'm making no promises that I'll even finish this one. I'm actually quite suprised I finished the last one.

This chapter kind of has no meaning, but will start to add to the story later in development. ;)

I toiled to get this done in time for Christmas. And, since I did it, I revised it a bit to include some X-Mas elements. :D Although it may be a bit dry on the "holiday side."

Anyway, here it is, the first chapter of Story 2, "The War on Isle O' Hags." (Just remember, sequels are never better than the first/original. Keep that in mind when you post comments. ;) )

Anything in bold is an action. Whatever isn't is in normal type. Enjoy. :)

Chapter 1

It’s been five years since the Grey Jinjos escaped from Chuffy the Train and out to who-knows-where. Yet, surprisingly, Isle O’ Hags has been as peaceful as it was before Gruntilda appeared. Banjo and Kazooie relocated to Freezeezy Peak, where they were both helping with the clean-up of the Y2K incident. Today marks the predicted moment where Freezeezy Peak will be completely free of radioactive activity, debris, and the snowman will have been completely rebuilt. Banjo was helping with the snowman, while Kazooie stayed in the house, unable to actually help move anything. Banjo was also working with Jinjo X.

Banjo: This will be the best Christmas present ever given to Freezeezy Peak!

Jinjo X: I know! I just hope we can get this finished, today being Christmas Eve and all.

Banjo: Well, there isn’t much left to do. Banjo carried a long piece of wood towards the snowman, with Jinjo X helping him. They caught an elevator, went to the top, and set it down on the brim of his hat. Okay, now we just need to paint this sucker.

Jinjo X: No problem. The two started to paint.

In one of the houses at the foot of the snowman, Kazooie was relaxing by a roaring fire. She was staring at the Christmas tree by the window.

Kazooie: Alright, I’m gonna go now…. Kazooie sat up and ran outside. She ran past the snowman, across the stack of presents, and into Wozza’s cave. Hey Wozza!

Wozza: Kazooie! What’s up? Wozza was sitting in an armchair made of ice.

Kazooie: Nothing, just visiting.

Wozza: Alright. He turned his attention to his TV, which looked suspiciously like Boggy’s TV.

Kazooie: Nice TV set. Where’d you get it?

Wozza: Uh…. I got it as…. An early Christmas present, yeah.

Kazooie: Whatever. Kazooie had made Wozza focus directly on his TV, desperate to get Kazooie to stop asking questions about it. With Wozza distracted, Kazooie walked to the wall the TV was mounted on and jumped up into the hole above her.

Back with Banjo.

Banjo: Alright, just this last paint stroke, and…. He dipped his giant paint brush into the can of black paint, wiped the snow off the wooden hat, and painted the remaining visible wood. It’s done! He shouted these words, and it echoed throughout the peak. Many villagers started to celebrate as Banjo went to the surface. He saw Jinjo X, who was talking excitedly to other Jinjos.

Jinjo X: Hey Banjo, you coming to the party?

Banjo: No, I have some other business to take care of.

Jinjo X: Whatever…. He walked away with the other Jinjos.

Banjo: Alright…. He started to walk towards Wozza’s cave. He narrowly dodged the other snowmen, who were throwing snowballs at the newly-made, giant one. Apparently, they were jealous, since they weren’t as popular anymore because of it. Banjo started to run, as his feet were getting cold. He ran inside Wozza’s cave, but slipped as he set foot on the icy floor.

Wozza: Banjo? Wozza stood up, bracing himself, ready to protect his new television set. What are you doing here? Banjo? Banjo didn’t reply as he kept slipping, then tripped over Wozza’s armchair, then flew into the opening Kazooie slipped into. Oh well. Wozza sat himself back into his armchair, turning his focus to the TV.

Banjo: Alright, Wozza, I guess I’ll be out of here.

Wozza: Uh-huh. Wozza was too busy to notice Banjo and Kazooie holding a giant icy key, carrying it out of the door.

Back at Banjo’s new house.

Banjo: Yes! Banjo and Kazooie let go of the key. Instead of it falling, it floated before them, then set itself above the mantelpiece of the fireplace on the other side of the room. There we go. He looked to his right to see a clock. Right as he looked, it chimed midnight. And just in time too!

Kazooie: Awesome! It’s Christmas!

Banjo: Wait. Don’t get carried away. We can’t tell everyone now, it’s too early.

Kazooie: Oh, come on, I’m too eager! Why not now?

Banjo: Kazooie, please, I’m sure you can wait another eight or so hours. Just go to sleep, it’ll go by like that.

Kazooie: Whatever. Kazooie walked into a door in the back of the room. The light inside turned off.

Banjo: Finally, some alone time. Banjo walked over to his recliner chair. He pulled his Gameboy out of his backpack and started to play it. He looked up and immediately saw the Ice Key. His eyes lit up as he both stared at it and lost a life in the game he was playing. He hadn’t even noticed that someone had turned his reclining chair to face directly towards the giant key, but never even thought of it in the first place. He looked behind him at the giant tree, lit up with lights and the star on top. He turned off his Gameboy, set it on the recliner, and went into another room in the back, the closet. He came out with a sack, and dumped the contents, presents, next to the tree. Then, he grabbed his coat, which was collecting dust on the coat rack, and left.

banjo nerd
26th December 2005, 06:47 PM
WOW that was awsome man the only problem is that kazoiee,she was never sarcastic/smartass wise but the hole other things a million thumbs up

DevilBottles
26th December 2005, 07:06 PM
Well, with it being Christmas, and the prize possession of the town being fixed, I'd have to say that Kazooie would be cheerful for a while :)

EDIT: Oh yeah, I forgot to mention this. I'm going on a vacation to Florida from today to New Year's Eve. So, no new chapters until then. :)

repobanjo
30th December 2005, 07:18 PM
Nice story. I liked that one just as much as the first one. I just can't wait until the next chapter!

RareBK
31st December 2005, 04:17 PM
Nice story, I've got to read the past one. ( Never got to read all of it!)

R Hunter
3rd January 2006, 02:46 AM
There is no way in reality, that i'll let a DB fic vanish into the abyss. :) Even more so since it's starting off so well.

Dragon_Kazooie
3rd January 2006, 10:49 PM
There is no way in reality, that i'll let a DB fic vanish into the abyss. :) Even more so since it's starting off so well.
Ditto, R Hunter. DB, you CAN'T let this die. (Already? :confused: )

DevilBottles
5th January 2006, 09:08 PM
Ditto, R Hunter. DB, you CAN'T let this die. (Already? :confused: )
no, i won't. you have to realize, i wouldn't do that ;)

I'm sorry.... After I got back from vacation, I got extremely sick. I'm still sick, but I'm improving....

I can probably make a new chapter this weekend. I was planning on something to add to the new chapter... maybe I still can, but itll obviously be too late.... :rolleyes:

DevilBottles
9th January 2006, 12:37 AM
Chapter 2

Banjo opened the door to his house. He brushed his arms to remove the snow, hung his coat up, and went into a back room. As soon as his head hit the pillow, he knew something was wrong. He sprung into an upright position. He looked around, then quietly set his feet down on the ground. He slowly rose off the bed and left out the door into the living room. He looked at the presents, on the other side of the room. He moved slowly towards them, past the armchair. He knelt down next to a circle-shaped present. He looked at the tag. It read: To Banjo, From Grunty. Banjo’s eyes widened as he started to tear the paper. When the paper was finally gone, Banjo gasped as he looked down upon a fishbowl with a goldfish in it.

Banjo: Wait…. I don’t get it. Why would Grunty give me something? Especially something nice. …. Banjo stood back up, very confused, and started to walk back to his room when he heard a small thud. He looked back to see the goldfish swim into the side of the bowl. Heh, stupid – The goldfish knocked its head on the bowl again, and Banjo felt his stomach drop as he saw Jinjo X outside the window, about to open the door. He looked at where the fireplace and the Ice Key used to be and, to his relief, saw only his kitchen. The goldfish knocked his head on the bowl a third time, and immediately the front door opened.

Jinjo X: Man, Banjo, you shoulda been – Banjo looked back, and his eyes widened as he saw his bed flip backwards, crashing through the wall behind it.

Kazooie: Ahhh!!! What IS this!?!?!

Banjo: Why is it doing that?!?!? The kitchen swung around to reveal the Ice Key and the fireplace. The sudden speed made the Ice Key fly off the mantelpiece. It bounced off the wall to the right and stopped in front of the fireplace, giving off its signature float and twirl motion. Then, the cushion on the chair flew off, yet still attached to a spring. The Gameboy, still sitting on it, flew off, and, to Banjo’s horror, flew into the Ice Key, knocking it back into the fireplace. It melted, and the water doused the flames.

Jinjo X: Woah… I’d better be off. He left, slamming the door behind him.

Banjo: … He sunk to his feet and moved to the fireplace. He sifted around in the logs, hoping to find the Ice Key underneath. Kazooie came out of her room.

Kazooie: What’s going on here? You’re bed is on top of my bed, and the Ice Key is gone… Banjo? She grabbed his shoulder and shook him. Banjo? Banjo pointed into the fireplace.

Banjo: It’s… in there.

Kazooie: No it's not. I don’t see it in there.

Banjo: It was in there.

Kazooie: What do you mean?

Banjo: It melted.

Kazooie: It - ?

Banjo: Yes, it melted!

Kazooie: What, now?!?! Why now!?!? This can’t be happening! I must be dreaming. Kazooie rammed her head into the wall next to the fireplace.

Banjo: What’re you doing?

Kazooie: I thought I’d wake up.

Banjo: That’s not funny.

Kazooie: I was serious.

Banjo: Well, what now? We can’t show those people nothing.

Kazooie: I know, I know. I need to think.

Banjo: … We need to relocate. We have to move from Freezeezy Peak, and fast.

Kazooie: Banjo, running from your problems never solves anything.

Banjo: Hey, it works, doesn’t it? He went back into his room, pulled off his backpack, and started to pack his things in it. He packed one pair of shiny, yellow shorts, then couldn’t fit anything else.

Kazooie: Alright. She went into her room and started to gather her things as well.

Banjo: I hate this move. He struggled to remove his shorts from his backpack, then the ripped them out. They fell on the ground behind him with a ton of force, light sparkling behind it. He packed all his things in a suitcase, then stuck the suitcase in his pack. As he put it on his back, Kazooie walked in and jumped into the backpack as well.

At Jingaling’s Palace.

Banjo explained what happened to Jingaling. Kazooie was playing rock-paper-scissors with Toots, and Jinjo X was looking outside, making sure no one came in.

Banjo: I’m so sorry…. Isn’t there a second one?

Jingaling: Banjo…. He sighed and drooped his head. That one was legit. Almost nothing can actually replace.

Banjo: Almost nothing?

Jingaling: There is one other one. You can find it here, in Jinjo Village, out at the beach. However, with this second, miserable key, we might not even be able to pull this off. This one is as good as a fake.

Banjo: Why?

Jingaling: This one is eight times smaller than the actually one, and doesn’t do the float and spin routine. If you drop it, it’ll just plop to the ground. And, you will find it in an icy cave, but, unfortunately, in a hopping, plastic thing.

Banjo: Oooo, so what, not as mystical. Does it matter?

Jingaling: It would look cooler, man!

Banjo: …. *cough*

Jingaling: Plus, it’s too small. It wouldn’t easily be fooled by this second key.

Banjo: Well, should I go get it anyway?

Jingaling: *Sigh* Yeah, sure, go….

Banjo: Alright then. Banjo ripped Kazooie from Toots and left.

TBC

Dragon_Kazooie
9th January 2006, 02:01 AM
Nice chapter, DB. Weird...how Grunty would know this, AND......the fact that she's a headless idiot.

DevilBottles
15th January 2006, 05:16 AM
Strange how Dragon can be the only one to actually reply after I just brought this back up. :)

Anyway, you can all expect a new chapter .... uh... How should I should I say this? Right now, its 12:16 in the morning, so... (EDIT) tomorrow. :D

BKSonic1234
15th January 2006, 02:53 PM
You made a chapter on the 8th? I don't remember that. Good chapter, though!

BanjoSonic
15th January 2006, 06:29 PM
This story's looking great! I hope you finish chapter 3, DB!

DevilBottles
17th January 2006, 12:52 AM
Chapter 3

Banjo: Dang. That was easy! Banjo held up the tiny ice key above his head. Kazooie popped up.

Kazooie: Yeah, it was! Go to Jingaling’s now.

Banjo: Yeah, yeah. Banjo leaped from the high ledge above the ground on the cliff. As he walked back onto Jinjo Village soil, he looked to his right. He was filled with joy as he saw the Grey Jinjo house, which had finally been restored in the past.

Kazooie: We’ve all seen their house. Can we just go?

Banjo: Huh? Banjo snapped back to reality. Oh, yeah, alright. Banjo kept walking towards the palace. He reached it, skipped happily inside, and presented the key to Jingaling. Here ya’ go.

Jingaling: Ah, thanks. He took it from Banjo’s hand. Alright, my son and I are going to have to work on this. Why do you go exploring for a while? I’m sure you can go to Mayahem Temple.

Banjo: Eh, but I liked that place. And the author has a tendency to kinda skip the first world before I can really get into it.

Jingaling: …. Excuse me?

Banjo: Oh, jeez. Never mind. Banjo walked to the door. Jinjo X was standing there, looking outside. He was wearing black sunglasses, had a smirk on his face, and was leaning on one side of entrance, a foot against the wall and his arms crossed. What’s up with you?

Jinjo X: Uhn…? Wh - … Guh…. OW! Jeez, my head’s killing me. He balled his hand up in a fist and smacked it onto his head twice. He then opened his mouth wide, drool flowed out, and who whipped around, falling to the ground. Banjo looked at Jingaling, who was looking at a cardboard cut-out of himself, flexing his muscles in front of it. He looked back to Jinjo X, who seemed to be mumbling under his breath and trying to run from something, while still on his side on the ground. Banjo slowly left, narrowly avoiding Jinjo X, who was now writhing on the floor, his tongue wildly flapping around his face.

Banjo: What was up with him?

Kazooie: I know you know what’s up with him.

Banjo: Yeah…. I know. Do you think Jingaling knows?

Kazooie: Obviously not. We’d have seen the two talking. I mean, Jingaling set the law. If his own son broke it …. Well, let’s just say it won’t be pretty.

Banjo: Yeah, I –

Kazooie: I mean, come on! He’s only 12! He should know better!

Banjo: Kazooie?

Kazooie: Where do you think the kids at Freezeezy Peak got all of it anyway? Let alone have a party and not have the cops bust the party?

Banjo: Kazooie! Stop!

Kazooie: Huh? Oh, sorry….

Banjo: Thank you. Banjo walked to the silo. He jumped in. Inside, he saw something different. Inside was a computer with the options available to him. Regardless, he chose Wooded Hollow. He instantly appeared at Wooded Hollow. He looked and saw the door to Mayahem Temple was closed. Aw, man, what are we supposed to do?

Kazooie: I reckon we should see Jiggywiggy. She pointed to Jiggywiggy’s Temple. Strangely enough, the door was open, and there wasn’t a doorman. Kazooie sighed as Banjo started to walk to the temple. I wish I had more lines.

Banjo: I just wish our second adventure was as easy as this.

Kazooie: Yeah, I wish. Next thing you know, a giant secret of Isle O’ Hags and our entire world will be revealed within this chapter!

Banjo: Eeeh, yeah, let’s go with that! Banjo walked into the temple.

Meanwhile, in Spiral Mountain. The giant crack in the wall where Banjo’s house once was still untouched. However, today, a little, green baddie stumbled upon the hole. He walked in, hoping to find someone to stomp on. He went in, Spiral Mountain stood still for a couple of minutes, and the baddie came back out, screaming frantically, running as fast as his incredibly short, stubby, skinny legs could carry him. He came back, and a bunch of other ones too, and he erected a sign. On it, a Jinjo with giant, fang-like teeth were sticking out of its mouth, and he had horns coming out of his head. A giant circle circled the picture of the Jinjo, and a cross slashed through the picture and the Jinjo. They all ran away quickly, some stupidly running into each other.

Back in Wooded Hollow.

Banjo: Thanks a lot, man!

Jiggywiggy: No prob! Banjo left the palace.

Banjo: Wow, he sure has changed.

Kazooie: I’ll say. What’s up with him? He’s all like in a 70’s mode….

Banjo: No, not really, he was just –

Kazooie: Okay! Quit arguing! Just go into Mayahem Temple!

Banjo: Eh? Oh, right. Banjo walked to the Mayahem Temple entrance. Heh heh. I just noticed something.

Kazooie: What? Banjo stopped directly in front of Mayahem Temple’s entrance.

Banjo: Last adventure, we started exploring through the first world in the fourth chapter. Same here!

Kazooie: Uh…. Kazooie let out a long sigh. Why do you have to keep suggesting we are living in a storybook?

Banjo: I don’t know. Banjo walked into Mayahem Temple’s entrance.

BKSonic1234
17th January 2006, 01:18 AM
Banjo: Last adventure, we started exploring through the first world in the fourth chapter. Same here!DB...that was the third chapter. xD

EDIT: Oh, wait. I get it. The next chapter you'll be in the level. My bad.

DevilBottles
17th January 2006, 01:20 AM
DB...that was the third chapter. xD

EDIT: Oh, wait. I get it. The next chapter you'll be in the level. My bad.
they havent started to explore the first world yet. That'll be in the fourth chapter ;)

EDIT: Wow.... You edited that before I had a chance to realize you had :p

R Hunter
17th January 2006, 03:12 AM
Hmm....A Jinjo with fangs? Odd...great so far DB.

repobanjo
17th January 2006, 07:24 PM
Myserious, yet iawesome! You did it again, DB!

DevilBottles
17th January 2006, 08:18 PM
Hmm....A Jinjo with fangs? Odd...great so far DB.
well... not really a Jinjo with fangs.....

You'll find out later. I've said too much >> <<

R Hunter
20th January 2006, 05:37 PM
Teh bumped.

DevilBottles
20th January 2006, 05:59 PM
Teh bumped.
i just noticed that you haven't updated your signature to include this story, R. :p

Well, finals are over. ;) You know what that means! ....

*Ahem*

Yeah, school's tough. In fact, so tough, I can barely relax and make more chapters. I hope you guys will be okay if I only make new chapters on weekends.

R Hunter
20th January 2006, 08:56 PM
Fixed. ;) And that's fine by me DB.

DevilBottles
22nd January 2006, 10:18 PM
Chapter 4

Banjo came out of the staircase and emerged into Mayahem Temple. He looked around and found everything to be peaceful. Happy with this, he walked forward. He then noticed that one of the dart-shooting heads had a cell-phone implanted into the side of its head. It turned and saw Banjo, but paid no notice.

Darter: No, I wanted ten stocks…. No! Ten! …. Oh great, never mind the- … Really? Buy fifty then! …. Yes!

Banjo: Umm. Hi. He moved around a bit, trying to get the darter to shoot him. Hello?

Darter: *sigh* I’m sorry, I’m going to have to let you go, there is some low-life on my front lawn making faces at me. The phone slowly submerged into the side of his head. What do you want?

Banjo: Why aren’t you shooting darts at me?

Darter: There is no need to. I used to be the slave of Targitzan, but I bought my freedom. Why do you ask?

Banjo: You have money?

Darter: *sigh* Yes. After the stock market opened here, I’ve been filthy rich.

Banjo: Wait, the stock market? Here? Where?

Darter: Up there. Unable to move anywhere but from side to side, he shifted his eyes upward, toward Targitzan’s Temple. Banjo looked up and saw a gigantic banner on the back of Targitzan’s Temple that read, “Stock Market Open.”

Banjo: “Why must everything be so corporate?”

Darter: Excuse me?

Banjo: Why here, I mean.

Darter: It was the biggest building available in Isle O’ Hags at the time.

Banjo: *sigh* Well, it can’t be that bad. Thanks.

Darter: You’re not welcome. The phone appeared on his face again. Sorry about that.

Banjo: Jerk. He walked around Mayahem Temple until he reached Targitzan’s Temple. He entered. Inside, there was a lot of shouting and numerous Jinjos and moles making signs with their hands at each other. The door at the back had been sealed, and Banjo had just come into the first room. He walked inside and everyone completely stopped and stared at him. To his left, Banjo heard a familiar voice.

Targitzan: Get back to work! Everyone started making symbols to each other again. Banjo! Get over here! Banjo tried to turn to leave, but saw that the door had sealed itself shut. He walked over to Targitzan. What are you doing here?

Banjo: Well, I’m supposed to come here. Jingaling asked me to. I didn’t think I’d find your temple had turned into the actual stock market.

Targitzan: Yes, well, after you destroyed me and took my gold, I had to make a living. So, I created the stock market. I believe you know how it works, so I’ll explain it to you. But, I bet you didn’t know that I keep a bit of the money for myself.

Banjo: I knew it! Why though?

Targitzan: I told you before, I was broke. But, now, I have plenty of money to make a living. I’m going straight now. I’m going to allow the people full payment now. In fact, I just announced it to all of Isle O’ Hags. We should be seeing more stocks bought now than ever before!

Banjo: That’s great news! Can me and Kazooie stick around to watch?

Targitzan: Kazooie? Who’s Kazooie?

Banjo: Why, she’s my Breegull buddy. Kazooie popped out of her backpack.

Kazooie: Hey Targitzan!

Targitzan: AH!!! Everyone stopped again, including Banjo and Kazooie. Get her out of here! She’s the one that destroyed me with those blasted eggs! A couple of giant, muscular, yellow Jinjos appeared by the sides of Banjo, ripped Kazooie out of her backpack, and threw her outside. They pressed a button next to the door, and it slid shut.

Kazooie: Fine. I didn’t want to stay anyway. She ran past the temple and jumped off the cliff and fell in the water. She got out and left Mayahem Temple.

Banjo: Hey! Wait! He ran to the door and tried to claw out. Let me out! I can’t leave Kazooie out there!

Targitzan: Don’t worry, she’ll be fine. Now, please, relax and wait for our celebration.

Banjo: Fine. He sat on an armchair near Targitzan.

Back with Kazooie, who was in Jingaling’s Palace.

Kazooie: Jeez, I hope he comes back soon.

Jingaling: You aren’t at all mad? Jingaling was working on a giant computer at the back of the palace, which had appeared there after Jingaling had pressed a button at the front door.

Kazooie: Nah, I know he’s being held against his will. She sat on an armchair, and a footstool under her outstretched feet. There was a laptop on her lap (no pun intended). She was watching the stock market on her computer, but something looked wrong to her. Hey, Singalong, get over here.

Jingaling: What? He walked over to Kazooie, who was counting on her feathers.

Kazooie: Is it supposed to be that high? She was pointing to “Overall Money Spent on Stocks.” It was at 999,999,999 notes.

Jingaling: Well, it does seem a bit high, but I believe they are to be celebrating their billionth note soon. In fact –

Jinjo X: Hey, dad! In an act of boredom, I bought one stock of Grunty Industries worth one note! Kazooie looked at it again. It read 1,000,000,000.

Kazooie: Well, what do you – Kazooie jumped out of her seat as the website failed on her. She refreshed the page, but it said the page couldn’t be found.

Uh-oh. What American event does this seem similar to? ;)

repobanjo
22nd January 2006, 10:34 PM
Oh noes! All of the Isle O' Hags will be greatly in depression! Good chapter, as always!

DevilBottles
22nd January 2006, 10:35 PM
Oh noes! All of the Isle O' Hags will be greatly in depression! Good chapter, as always!
Did I make it too obvious? :rolleyes: Silly me :p

Thanks. :D

repobanjo
22nd January 2006, 10:39 PM
I thought it was supposed to be obvious so that we will wonder what will happen. Like cause and effect, we have to know the cause to speculate about the effect. Therfore, if we did not know that uhhh, that certain thing (do not want to spoil it for people who do not know) happened, we would not have the anticipation that we have now.

I think you made a good desicion to make it obvious. Of course, obvious is subjective.....

DevilBottles
30th January 2006, 02:29 AM
Chapter 5

Earlier that day….

Targitzan: Alright, the announcement is out. Expect a lot more buying!

Crowd of Jinjos: Yes sir! They all got back to working and making stupid symbols at each other, but the waving of hands grew faster.

Banjo: Umm… Don’t mind my interrupting your celebration, but shouldn’t you get more people for this? These Jinjos can barely do this.

Targitzan: I can’t afford it, now that I’m giving out all the money! Besides, they’ll be fine…. Targitzan pulled down a screen behind him with the amount of notes received on stocks projected on it. The number was 999,994,672. Heh heh… We’re rolling in the money guys! Work faster!

Banjo: Umm… Targitzan, you really shouldn’t….

Targitzan: Faster! Banjo kept trying to stop him, but the Jinjos still obeyed, and the symbols were flying everywhere, screams echoing throughout the room.

Banjo: Wait! You can’t do this – Below the number of notes collected was a list of the companies involved in the market. Banjo, Targitzan, and even the Jinjos stopped when they saw that one of the companies, Klungo Korp, was completely deleted from the list.

Targitzan: Umm…. They are disappointed with your performance. Even faster! The Jinjos started working even faster. Banjo couldn’t believe they were moving as fast as they were. But, he was more focused on the company list; as the number of notes went up, the number of companies went down.

Banjo: Targitzan, please, stop! Something bad is going to happen, I know it! The note number hit 999,996,907.

Targitzan: Never! Faster! As the Jinjos went faster, the note number increased. Rareware was stricken from the list.

Banjo: This is hopeless. He looked for a way around the back of Targitzan. He saw a little nook behind him, and squeezed his way in.

Targitzan: Faster! Nintendo vanished from the list, as the note number hit 999,998,074. Banjo slid inside the back of Targitzan and climbed up to the top where his dominant mouth was located. He cleared his throat.

Targitzan: Faster, you blokes! The note number was at 999,999,999. Only Grunty Industries remained.

Banjo: STOP!!! The Jinjos stopped, but, it was too late. The note number reached 1,000,000,000, and Grunty Industries vanished. The Jinjo stared up at Targitzan, who spit out Banjo. He fell in the middle of the crowd.

Targitzan: What are you all doing!?! Work, fools!

An Orange Jinjo: We can’t….

Targitzan: Oh yeah? Why NOT!?!

An Orange Jinjo: You worked us too fast. Stocks kept being bought and then sold, and now that’s overloaded the systems. The stocks and money all vanished…. We can’t give out stocks, give them back…. And we can’t repay those poor people. There was a deep silence between all the Jinjos. Everyone’s attention was now on the orange Jinjo, who now realized his speaking up wasn’t a good idea. Targitzan stared down at the Jinjo and released multiple darts at the Jinjo, suspending him up on the wall. All the Jinjos migrated to the wall, trying to get him down. While they did this, Banjo walked out.

Banjo: Oh man…. Oh man, oh man, oh man…. Instead of jumping down the cliff, he ran back down. As he ran, he noticed some stonies putting up a sign on the Kickball Stadium. It read, “Closed For Good: Stock Market Crash.” Wow… What a conveniently named …. What am I thinking? He ran out of Mayahem Temple. He came out into Wooded Hollow, entered the silo, appeared in Jinjo Village, and entered the palace.

Jingaling: Banjo! What’s going on?

Banjo: I have no idea. Kazooie kept trying to refresh the stock market page, but to no results. Targitzan was working the employees too hard, and all of a sudden… nothing.

Jinjo X: Hey, I bought the last stock ever…. Awesome!

Jingaling: Quiet! Banjo, what happened?

Banjo: I just told you! I tried to stop them, but they wouldn’t listen… I got them to stop, but it was too late. Apparently, all companies are down the tube too. I just saw the kickball stadium in Mayahem Temple close as well.

Kazooie: What’s going to happen then?

Jingaling: I guess we wait and see….

One day later.

Banjo: That wasn’t one of your better ideas. Banjo, Kazooie, Jingaling, and Jinjo X were all outside. They were looking down at the village. All of the Jinjo houses were gone, placed with a sign that read, “Repossessed.” The Jinjos were all standing in front of the signs, moaning and wailing along with the rest of their families.

Jingaling: Okay, I’ll have this fixed. Don’t you worry, I’ll get everything back up and running. Umm… you go and do whatever. I’ll fix things up with Targitzan.

Banjo: Alright…. I just hope you do. Jingaling and Jinjo X ran back into the palace to begin work. Kazooie hopped into her pack.

Kazooie: So, did you have anything to do with it? Banjo walked down to the silo.

Banjo: No. He jumped into the silo and appeared on the plateau. I tried stopping it, I told you.

Kazooie: Sorry… I just didn’t think we’d have another one of these….

Banjo: Um, what?

Kazooie: Wow, you must not read many textbooks.

Banjo: No, I don’t. I never attended school, except for Gobi Elementary, of course.

Kazooie: Wow, I never knew that!

Banjo: Whatever. Banjo walked to and jumped in Glitter Gulch Mine.

The role of the ending statement this chapter will be played by Grey.

:grey

DevilBottles
4th February 2006, 01:16 AM
Okay, this happened in my last fiction, and I was hoping, sooooo much, that it wouldn't happen in this one. But it has, and I didn't expect it to happen so early. :no:

I can easily stop this. I have plenty of other things to do with my time. I sure hope I've got some lurkers here, but if there are, please do speak up.

repobanjo
4th February 2006, 01:53 AM
Oh, don't worry. I'm quite enjoying this. I would enjoy for you to continue, but it would be quite stupid for you to push on for one person.

DevilBottles
4th February 2006, 01:55 AM
Well, let's just see how many actually are reading. I'll give everyone who reads this fiction two days to post. If I don't get enough replies.... well, then.... yeah

BKSonic1234
4th February 2006, 02:34 AM
*jumps with hand waving* I'm reading! I'm reading! Don't quit the story, it's good. :D

Ozimul
26th April 2006, 03:40 PM
(crickets chirp very quietly, then run away as I enter the fanfic)

I read through the first one, then came here and found this one. It's really nice. If you're still alive and if you bother reading this, I hope you get it back up. Yes, it's been a coulple of months, but I know what it's like to leave a story hanging...

DevilBottles
28th April 2006, 01:06 AM
(crickets chirp very quietly, then run away as I enter the fanfic)

I read through the first one, then came here and found this one. It's really nice. If you're still alive and if you bother reading this, I hope you get it back up. Yes, it's been a coulple of months, but I know what it's like to leave a story hanging...
Hmm... I'm not sure. If BKSonic comes more, then I'd only have three readers. That really isn't enough to start again. Plus, life has been getting in the way.

If I get more readers, at least six, I might consider starting up again.

repobanjo
28th April 2006, 01:14 AM
I was reading....

DevilBottles
28th April 2006, 01:18 AM
I was reading....
Well, I knew you came all the time. You were one of the three readers that I mentioned. ;)

Kazooie-Tooie
28th April 2006, 03:13 PM
I'm reading!!!! I'm reading!!!!

s.w.a.t
28th April 2006, 08:37 PM
I'm reading.

BKSonic1234
29th April 2006, 02:13 PM
I'm reading! I've been waiting for Chapter 6 4evuh! :D

killamanjaro
14th May 2006, 01:53 AM
im reading this too!!!:D

Benjo-Kazooie
14th May 2006, 02:05 AM
Nice job, that had to take some effert.

DevilBottles
14th May 2006, 07:41 AM
*head swirls around* Hm? Since when did I have eight readers?

*sigh* See, the thing is... school's beating down on my. Hard. If you all could wait, possibly, until about two weeks into June, I might have some more chapters for you guys.

But, don't get your hopes up. I've been retired from this for a while now....

Ozimul
15th May 2006, 01:54 AM
*head swirls around* Hm? Since when did I have eight readers?

*sigh* See, the thing is... school's beating down on my. Hard. If you all could wait, possibly, until about two weeks into June, I might have some more chapters for you guys.

But, don't get your hopes up. I've been retired from this for a while now....
School is evil. >.>

Don't worry, stories take time, and if you don't take it up again, the world won't end. At least, I think it won't... ;)