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Twi
18th March 2010, 02:49 AM
I think I figured out the proper technique. :)

And no, it's not only about rhyming the last two words of each phrase in the rhyme.

It all depends on syllable count. :teach: If the syllable count is too long, or uneven on one side of the rhyme, than the rhyme will sound weird.

Grunty Rhymes are composed of two rhyming lines, and are, on average, 14-16 syllables in length. That's about 7-8 syllables for each part of the rhyme.

Example:
It really does sound quite absurd, adventure of a bear and bird!

Let's break this one up, shall we?

"It-real-ly-does-sound-quite-ab-surd" is the first part of the line, and is 8 syllables in length.

"ad-ven-ture-of-a-bear-and-bird" is the last part of the line, also 8 syllables.

Grunty's rhymes aren't always symetrical in syllable length:

Your feathered buddy, that you've brung, useless like a pile of dung!
"Your-fea-thered-bud-dy-that-you've-brung" is 8 syllables, "use-less-like-a-pile-of-dung" is 7 syllables, but it still sounds like a proper Grunty Rhyme due to being within the 14-16 syllable bracket.

Now I've heard a few people say that Grunty's rhymes in Nuts & Bolts were weak, and nostalgia was most likely not a factor in their conclusion.

The reason for those rhymes sounding weak: they don't follow the formula, and are either uneven, or too long.

While you slept I've become a mechanic, building Gruntbots to make you panic!
"While-you-slept-I've-be-come-a-me-chan-ic," is a whopping 10 syllables in length, while "buil-ding-Grunt-bots-to-make-you-pan-ic" is 9. That's 19 syllables total, and sounds rather weird when compared to a 14-16 syllable rhyme.

At least I haven't got a gut! Let's rumble now, I'll kick your butt!

The above rhyme is one of the better ones in the game, and sounds much more like a classic Grunty Rhyme. It falls within the correct syllable count.

Yes, it's me, you podgy fool! I'm back again and ready to rule!
The first part is 7 syllables long, but still sounds weird due to the other half being 9.

We can fix this one by changing the word "ready" to a single syllable word "set."

Yes, it's me, you podgy fool! I'm back again and set to rule!

Sound better? I thought so.

Overall, for those of you who for whatever reason, come up with Grunty Rhymes on occasion, remember your syllable counts!

That is all.

:teach:

King Gobi
18th March 2010, 02:55 AM
That is awesome o.o

Miss Who?
18th March 2010, 03:33 AM
did my story inspire this ;)

This is interesting.
I'll have to keep this in mind when I write out the rest of the chapter for my game. :P

BobbyTheCat
18th March 2010, 06:45 AM
Well I will keep that in mind.

Twi
19th March 2010, 12:35 AM
did my story inspire this ;)

This is interesting.
I'll have to keep this in mind when I write out the rest of the chapter for my game. :P

Somewhat. XD

But I figured out what made a Grunty Rhyme, a Grunty Rhyme. :)

And it made me realize that Fracture had some rhymes that were pushing it; I'm looking at you, Chapter 6. ><

Banjokun
19th March 2010, 12:41 AM
Lots of poetry and time.

lemurboy12
19th March 2010, 12:45 AM
Yellow shorts, a blue backpack, style's what you really lack!

Guitar
19th March 2010, 12:52 AM
I wasn't mean for such hard work,
The lord of games is quite the jerk!

Tooie
19th March 2010, 01:00 AM
A forum user of my prestige
Would choose to rhyme like TwilightVestige

JohnyT94
1st April 2010, 01:08 PM
I read 'Pile' in 'Pile of dung' as Pie-all (2 syllables) which makes the grunty rhyme symetrical (8-8)

Maybe that's just because Rare and I are british. Or Maybe it's because I'm dumb.

Guitar
1st April 2010, 03:07 PM
I guess pile is to hour. It could be pronounced our, or ow-err.

tony111ster
1st April 2010, 03:14 PM
Banjo-Kazooie was really lame. I wasn't the star, and they're to blame!

I'm two times better then that bear and that bird. Any other opinions are just plain absurd!

Lord Of Games? What a joke! You are a hypocritical dope!

The games I make will be on Natal. The adventures will be grand, right, pal?

The jig is up, I let you win. Only because, you get under my skin! Er...bones.